Thursday, January 27, 2011

assighnment 17, the slam!

a) I learned from Greg and Beth Anne that a poem does not have to rhyme it should just have a few stanza's. Also you should try to put some emothion and actions in your poems.

b)In inspiration for my poem I used a song i made up for the first part and then the song Silent night kept coming in my head so I was writing about god and stuff.

c) Im proud of the detailed words I used.

d) I felt kind of nervous.

e) At the end I thaught I did well so I was proud, but the comments I got wasent very good; like I should of been louder, so I guess I did'nt feel good before or after .

f) I would change my voice, I would be  much louder, and change some of the stanza's.

Amen:(my poem): Honestly baby we are meant to last,
stormsand, sunshine
we've been through the worst and the best,
theres more to come, but it would be impossible with you not by my side.
So live with me in the water,
we can soak, it wont matter
so let us pray, to us we say:
god look at us here we are,
we've been here since the shepards quake at midnight rise
and all the people look at us and says; are they drowning?
but no we are not drowning we are simply soaking, soaking in water
but when the water is all dryed up it will straightly go to dust
(sparklydush, colourful dust, soft dust)
dust that wont fade away when you throw it,
but dust that will go up to heaven and bring them a noteof what we wanted you(god) to look at
So as I repeat; Honestly baby we are meant to lat,
stormsand,sunshine
we've been through the worst and the best,
theres more to come but it would be impossible with you not by my side
so love forever if you no its real, and whats the point to love if you no its just going to fade away.
amen.

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